- Meaningless Statements: such as "Since the dawn of time man has been obsessed with knowledge". The essay does not need a romantic lead-in so you should start it straight away. Like a film the first paragraph should be packed with TOK Action.
- Gross Unsubstantiated Generalizations: such as "Americans see wealth itself as a moral good". Be very careful with the use of the word all. Check carefully what it is you want to say. Ask yourself whether it is necessary for your essay to make such a sweeping statement?
- Pseudo-examples: These are fictional examples usually based on stereotyping - "An Israeli would regard the Defensive Wall as necessary while a Palestinian would see it as an infringement of his basic human liberties". Rather than relying on fiction, try and find a statement made by a real Israeli and a real Palestinian.
Worse are examples which typecast Areas of Knowledge, such as "A scientist would look at the statue and try to work out the forces in it while an artist would react emotionally to it" or "All scientists are atheists and religious believers highly emotional and prone to superstition".
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The reaction of most examiners reading these lines is to write in red pen: "Would they?" and knock off some points under Criteria A, B or C or combinations of these depending on the context.
- Dictionary Definitions: These are usually not at all helpful in clarifying TOK concepts. These are best dealt with in your own terms. It is better for you to explain what you understand as 'knowledge' as opposed to 'belief', 'subjective' versus 'objective', 'inference' as opposed to 'deduction'?
On the whole avoid being 'bogged down' by definitions. If one had to define Art before writing any essay on it then one would hardly get anywhere at all.
- Avoid Taking Examples from Textbooks or Quoting Philosophers: Textbooks used in a authoritative way, without and critical evaluation, often lead to poor TOK essays. The examiners are interested in what you have to say not the author of a textbook or a Philosopher. If you use a textbook or quote a Philosopher make sure you stand back and look critically at what is said. Do you agree with the author or philosopher - if yes, why? - and if not, why not?
If possible, always include your own counter arguments to quotes which are taken to support the Essay Title.
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